Research indicates that the characteristics we are born with have much more influence on our personality and development than any experiences we may have in our life. Which do you consider to be the major influence?

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Our
personality
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and development are influenced by the characteristics we are born
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these perform in our
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and when we need to solve a problem.
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, experiences have more reasons than what many have been led to
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, through phases
people
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always learn and adjust themselves, and
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is significant.
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with, our
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can be changed by what problems and situations we have
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. It is sure that we will solve the problem or deal with the situation base on
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characteristics we are born
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people
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always learn and adjust themselves. If we come across
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these again, we will find easier ways to deal with
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learn
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from
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time
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and develop ourselves to do in a better way.
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, when we have to deal with
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and again, our
personality
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would be change.
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, experiences induce learning and adjusting of us.
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, I have heard ‘
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changes
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people
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change’ from an older person. It is true, as my
personality
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was naughty and talkative, but I am
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patient
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and introverted extrovert. Cause I have
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from my
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experience
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that to be like that are not make any advantages to me,
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I adjust myself to be a greater one by take
time
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and develop gradually. So,
people
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can develop themselves and change
personality
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through
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. To sum up, our
personality
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and development are influenced by characteristics and experience.
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, experiences are the most
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because we can learn and adjust ourselves when we must deal with problems or situations
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, and behave the better ways.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • nature vs. nurture debate
  • genetic inheritance
  • personality traits
  • behavior patterns
  • heritability
  • twins studies
  • malleable characteristics
  • upbringing
  • environmental influences
  • critical periods
  • language acquisition
  • worldview
  • innate traits
  • personal experiences
  • psychological development
  • epigenetics
  • adaptive behaviors
  • cultural imprinting
  • temperament
  • social conditioning
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