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In many countries today, crime novels and TV crimes drams are becoming more and more popular. Why do you think these books and TV show are popular? What is your opinion of crime fiction and TV crime dramas?

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Nowadays,
crime
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fictions
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 and
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 case shows gain attention
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people
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 around the world, as it can be seen from
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dramas
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 in Korea,
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the USA
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, etc. Even though some scenes may contain
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violence, I personally think that they are becoming popular. In the following paragraphs, I will give some examples to represent why
crime
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 series are interesting and my
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opinions
 about violent
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fictions
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 and
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 shows.
To begin
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 with the popularity of criminal drama, the number of
this
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 type of
movies
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movie
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 is rising for a decade. I believe that there are three main reasons why
people
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 enjoy the shows.
Firstly
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,the violent scenes can excite them.
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, adrenaline would be released while
people
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 are watching the
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 series.
Secondly
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, some
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fictions
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 can explain the criminal mind, which
people
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 may be curious to know.
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,
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"Criminal mind", an
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 show, demonstrates how evils commit crimes.
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, one can learn
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science from
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dramas
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. A good example is that the "X'File", the most popular detective movie, explain how the evidence is destroyed by the murderer.
Althoug
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, I think both
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 fiction and
TV
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dramas
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 can give us
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 new experience,
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they
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 can give us some drawbacks. To illustrate, parents should not let
thier
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their
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 children watching
this
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 type of movie alone, since the children may try to do and follow what the actor
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.
Moreover
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, some murderers might do copycat from the movies. According to the US news,
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 number of criminal records were increasing while the "X'File" was on-air. In conclusion, both
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fiction
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 and movies which contain
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bad actions
such
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heists
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as heists
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, murder, rape, etc. could make the audience exciting,
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 they could lead to rising of criminals in our real life.
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, society should be aware of the result of consuming violent
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dramas
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 as well as
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books.
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