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As computer translate quickly and accurately, learning foreign languages is a waste of time?

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People
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 have different views about
languages
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 since some individuals tend to choose
computers
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 to translate
languages
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 as they argue that understanding
languages
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 is unnecessary. In my opinion, I strongly oppose that statement since choosing
computers
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 would just lead to several problems.
Computers
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 are not feasible to be carried anywhere and have a higher risk of malfunctioning, especially when using a program to interpret a language. They cannot be accessed freely because they are heavy and can get disrupted unpredictably by the systems, which makes them unable to be utilized properly.
For instance
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, students who frequently use
computers
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 to translate
languages
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 to help them finish assignments will strive to complete their tasks
due to
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 unexpected errors.
Therefore
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, if they learn the
languages
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 manually without
computers
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, they will finish their tasks more easily.
Furthermore
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,
people
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also
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 will struggle to experience face-to-face communication as they become dependent on
computers
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. It would be inconvenient to talk with native speakers, which can eventually result in miscommunication. To exemplify, one of my friends had a problem ordering some food in a restaurant because she could not communicate and relied on a computer as she did not bring it with her.
As a result
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, she got the wrong orders
due to
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 miscommunication.
Thus
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, the more
people
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 study foreign
languages
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, the easier they talk to native
people
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, which is why learning foreign
languages
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 is more beneficial.
To conclude
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, I believe studying foreign
languages
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 will offer positive points and will not be wasteful since individuals will avoid their dependency on
computers
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 and can master the
languages
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 to be used in daily life.
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, using
computers
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 to help
people
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 interpret
languages
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 will just bring more problems,
such
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 as sudden trouble as they cannot use the
computers
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 and it restricts
people
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 from having a direct conversation.

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task achievement
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