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In recent times many people are making the decision to live alone. What are the causes of this? Does it have positive or negative effects on society?

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There are many people nowadays living while young,old all ages choose to live alone. In the joint family positive or negative
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 on society.
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have
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 both advantages and disadvantages society With regards to
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 positive effect .
Firstly
 mostly the individual
live
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 alone our life enjoy the lifestyle according to choices.
Secondly
 good business
collect
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 money not the pressure for
family
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 member .
Moreover
 the starting new family in
next
 city .
Furthermore
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 the large negative effect living alone, recently days using mobile phone social media it is not attractive the family member. Human beings are not supported
outlet
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 of talk .
Lastly
 the mental health problems To conclude,
it
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 cities and
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society are changing in digital life most
individual
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are
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 living alone,
although
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 lack of benefits and more negative impacts
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