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Nowadays, families are not as close as in the past and a lot of people have become used to this. Why is this happening? Do the advantages of this trend outweigh the drawbacks?

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Nowadays families are not close to each other as in the past and society has become used to
this
 , the family bond has been broken and
this
situation
 is with the whole society. Though , the
situation
 has both
advantages
 and disadvantages. With respect to
advantages
 , Nowadays as we can see people don’t like to live in a nuclear family and most of the families who used to live together are living apart from each other these days. Through
this
 ,
situation
 an individual can get personal space
that is
 not available in a joint family.
However
 , within
this
 ,
situation
 a
person
 can get his dream’s come true . Due to some restrictions in a
,
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family a
person
 is unable to achieve his
life
 goals and by living alone those
life
 goals can be achieved as there are no restriction’s and a
person
 can become successful in his
life
. And by living alone an individual go through many bad situations which can make him more strong and intelligent to get success in
life
.
Moreover
 , the current
situation
 has disadvantages too. If a
person
 lives alone apart from his family , someday he may get stuck in any problem at that he has to deal with that
situation
 alone. But if he has a good family bond,
life
 becomes quite easy in comparison to living alone as there are elders in a family who will help a
person
 to get out of the
situation
 and they may
also
 guide you throughout the
life
otherwise
, a
person
 has to deal with ups and downs in his
life
 alone which becomes quite difficult. In conclusion, the
situation
 has both
advantages
 and disadvantages but as we can see
advantages
 are more. So, the current
situation
 can be beneficial for society.
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