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Some people believe that it is the responsibility of individuals to take care of their own health and diet. Others however believe that governments should make sure that their citizens have a healthy diet. Discuss both views and give your opinion

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It is important to have a balanced
diet
 by
people
 as it will obviously increase the healthiness of themselves.
However
, some argue that it is the
responsibilty
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responsibility
 of
government
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the government
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 to make sure their citizens
to
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apply
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have
a healthy
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healthy food
a portion of healthy food
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food
. in
this
essay
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i
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I
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 will give my opinion as it is important to have a
nutritios
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nutritious
diet
 by
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an individual
the individual
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individual
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individuals
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 while
government
 support to the same.
Firstly
,
the
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a
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balanced
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balance
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balanced
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diet
 is
the
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apply
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food
which
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that
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 includes all the necessary carbohydrates, proteins, minerals and as well as vitamins.
Therefore
, it is vital to know the components to be included in the daily meal.
Futher
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Further
people
 should have three meals per day while drinking
sufficient
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a sufficient
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 amount of water.
Furthermore
, the
people
 should have a good breakfast as it will directly impact
on
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the
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their
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 healthiness.
Besides
,
pepole
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people
 should manage to avoid fast
food
such
 as chips,
short-eats
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short eats
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 and
coulred
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cold
 drinks with
thier
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their
 busy lifestyle.
For
example
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 the recent research done by World Health Organization emphasised that
the
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apply
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people
 who
undertakes
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undertake
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 fast
food
 would lead to many
diseses
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diseases
such
 as Cholesterol, diabetics and heart attacks. Hense,
government
 a
government
 of a country has a major role in
foor
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food
for
 productivity and its consumption by the public. As a
government
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 it is essential to enforce laws and legislations to have healthy citizens.
Literally
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 the high imposed tax on
food
 could be minimized because in
such
scenario
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a scenario
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 it will benefit the public. Sri Lankan
government
recenly
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recently
 has stopped exporting
food
 which rated unhealthy to the society. To conclude, I would say it is the primary responsibility of individuals to have their own balanced
diet
 while the
govenrnment
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government
 should support at its best to
fullfil
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fulfil
full fill
 the same to their
pulic
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public
 in order to have a healthy
diet
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • health-conscious decisions
  • self-discipline
  • informed choices
  • personal accountability
  • regulating food industries
  • implementing policies
  • healthy eating
  • public health campaigns
  • subsidies for healthy food
  • enabling environment
  • accessible
  • affordable
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