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In the past, when students did a university degree, they tended to study in their own country. Nowadays, they have more opportunity to study abroad. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this development? You should use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence.

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In the past,
people
 had less opportunity to get an abroad
education
 and in general, they studied in their own countries. Nowadays, in the globalization era,
people
 try to do a university degree abroad in order to get more privileges for their future life. In
this
 essay, I will explore the advantages and disadvantages of
this
 tendency. There are some advantages to
this
 development.
Firstly
, when young
people
 leave their home to get foreign
education
, they become independent quicker than their peers who study in their own country and live with their parents.
Consequently
, overseas
students
 have more chances to build a successful career as they have to make decisions by themselves.
Secondly
,
students
, who study abroad, get boost confidence because they coped with the dread of uncertainty when they moved to another country. After all, it is a real challenge and
unique
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 experience.
Lastly
, study abroad lets
students
 get familiar with different cultures and lifestyles as they communicate with others from different parts of the world.
This
 could be
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very useful for their future professional networks and employment.
However
, foreign
education
 has
also
 several drawbacks.
First
 of all, it could be quite expensive, as international
students
 have to pay for rent, tuition fees and other many things for their daily life. Another downside of studying abroad
that
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 these
students
 are more likely to suffer from homesickness because they cannot be with their parents and friends even on weekends, especially if they did not leave their home before.
Finally
, foreign
students
 could feel
loneliness
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 as they could have quite a hard time connecting to local
people
 and making friendships and might even become isolated. In conclusion, while foreign
education
 gives many opportunities for successful employment and future career,
nevertheless
, it
also
 has certain difficulties.
People
 should assess all pros and cons before making decisions regarding studying abroad and be prepared to overcome possible problems.
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Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Examples make your writing easier to understand by illustrating points more effectively.

Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.

When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.

Linking words for giving examples:

  • for example
  • for instance
  • to illustrate this
  • to give a clear example
  • such as
  • namely
  • to illustrate
  • take, for example

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