Many people believe that modern music can have a negative impact on the young. Others believe the effect of modern music is positive. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

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really enriches our lives. Since it has not a single style,
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a variety of
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in almost every situation based on their mood.
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,
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some individuals believe that today’s
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has positive effects on the young,
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others including myself think that it has more downsides. Regarding positive aspects of modern-day
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, many young
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eclectic growing
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styles. As they have been created with excellent melodies,
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are more likely to listen to them frequently.
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, rap
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plays a vital role in young
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’s life.
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the words are hard to comprehend, they enjoy them listening which helps them to set or change their mood.
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,
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music
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style has somewhat helped
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young
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to enjoy themselves.
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, there are more negative effects associated with it. When considering
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of present
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, lyrics and the beat play
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major role. Unlike in the past, nowadays,
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do not have meaningful lyrics, and mostly give a bad impression to the young. When they listen to
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most of the time, they will probably have
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bad behaviour.
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, about
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decades ago,
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were calm and peaceful. After
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those
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,
people
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were over the moon, and they did not get confused with the beat.
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, today’s
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has
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fast beat,
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of listening to them, the young have become hyperactive which is detrimental for them. In conclusion,
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modern-day
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has some benefits
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the young, I firmly believe that
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disadvantages
outwiegh
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outweigh
the advantages.
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, we should appropriately select what to listen
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music
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plays a significant role in our life.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • lifestyles and behaviours
  • glorify
  • distract
  • academic performance
  • self-expression
  • identity formation
  • source of inspiration
  • social and political messages
  • amplifying
  • accessible
  • influential
  • parental and educational guidance
  • critically analyze
  • responsible consumption
  • mitigate
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