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The number of TV programs is growing day by day. Some people say it is good as it gives people more choices, while others say it affects the quality of TV programs. Discuss both the views and give your opinion.

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Television shows assist
the
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people to relax and enjoy. But, nowadays, the number of Television
channels
 are rapidly increased. Because of
this
, humans are in real confusion to choose the one to watch. Along with
this
, the
quality
 of these broadcast
are
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is
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 still
debetable
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debatable
. In my view, it is good to have more choices but, all
channels
 should promise about the
quality
 of telecast
also
.
This
 essay will examine the topic in detail in the following paragraphs.
To begin
 with, because of the arrival of dish antenna now persons are more accessible to opt the channel according to their wish.
Moreover
, plenty of telecasts satisfy their selection.
Besides
this
, youngsters are getting
plethora
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a plethora
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 of chances to express their talents through competitive shows.
For example
, a study conducted by Banaras Hindu University, India proved that
present
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the present
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 generation is getting more options to share their ideas than in the past one. To summarize, more
channels
 bring more opportunities to children as well as lots of choices to adults.
On the contrary
, there are unnecessary competitions going on between
channels
.
However
,
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the same
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same
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some
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 kind of play telecast by two different
channels
 will affect the
quality
 of the program. Apart from
this
, people may get bored easily by watching
same
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the same
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 kind of repeated broadcast. To exemplify, if one channel starts with
musical
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a musical
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 show means the opposite channel
also
 will start the same kind of play by adding little changes. But the viewers can easily catch that.
Finally
,
although
 lots of
channels
 offer many choices
also
, the broadcast
grade
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the grade
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 is still questionable. In my personal opinion, it is nice to have many
channels
 but all
channels
 should offer good
quality
 shows
also
.
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