Prison is the best punishment for criminals. How far do you agree or disagree with this statement. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

In today's world
crime
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all over the
places
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place
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. A number of
people
think that
,
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whoever
commited
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committed
to the
crime
they have to be in
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lock-up. while I am completely agreed that,
criminal
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criminals
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sould
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should
could
be in a
prison
.
Firstly
, one convincing argument can be made that if some
criminal
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free
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from
prison
, they will be very harmful
for
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the whole society.
In addition
,
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the criminal
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criminal
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criminals
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also
encourage
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to
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the
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other friends or their family members to commit a
crime
. Let,s take
Auckland
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the Auckland
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University research team, as an example, they
recenty
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recently
found that the young generation of
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the Moari
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community
commited
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committed
crime
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crimes
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because of their parents which already visited
prison
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the prison
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and
now
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are now
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free from it.
Furthermore
,
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such
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a kind
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kind
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kinds
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of
crime
also
be a shortcut for getting rich and mostly youth so it is very
impartant
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important
to make some hard
prison
rules so young
people
think
twish
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twice
before
commit
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the
crime
. Having said that, it is
also
undieable
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undeniable
undesirable
that, some prisoners learn some extra criminal activities from other prisoners in
prisosn
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prison
prisons
.
However
,
those
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kind
of
criminal
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criminals
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also
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threat and highly risky for other
people
. The best relevant instance is some American
prinsons
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prisons
. where we could find all
kind
of the criminal and they always make the gangs which harmful for other prisoners. Significantly, it is an important step to
divied
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divided
divide
criminal
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criminals
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on basis of their
crime
.
Thus
,it can be concluded that,
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whoever
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who ever
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whoever
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commited
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committed
crime
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a crime
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, they must send to
the
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prison
. It is very essential for
another
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other
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people
to keep a safe from
such
kind
of
the
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crime
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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