Scientists tell us that some activities are good for health and others are bad. Despite knowing that, millions of people still continue doing unhealthy activities. What are the causes and what are the solutions for this?
One of the greatest
asset
Fix the agreement mistake
assets
one
can have is good health. Some activities are beneficial and the rest are not, which is being actively advocated by the scientists. Change to a plural noun
ones
Still
many Add a comma
,Still
people
ignore this
fact and continue doing activities that deteriorates
their health. Change the verb form
deteriorate
This
essay will discuss the causes and possible solutions for such
an attitude.
Firstly
, albeit advances in the
medical facilities, there Correct article usage
apply
is
Change the verb form
are
plethora
of reasons why Add an article
a plethora
people
are suffering from various diseases. One of the major causes of this
is the negligence of healthy
lifestyle. Correct article usage
a healthy
Moreover
, lack of motivation and awareness also
contributes towards
Change preposition
to
people
not understanding the difference between healthy and unhealthy choices. Addiction to life threatening
substances is Add a hyphen
life-threatening
also
responsible for such
behaviour as people
feel helpless and tempted to get into such
activities. For an instance, people
addicted to smoking may argue that if they stop smoking then
it could affect their performance and mood.
Despite of
all Remove the preposition
apply
this
, there are certain solutions that can be adopted in order to tackle this
problem. Media
needs to cover the complications of not having a healthy lifestyle on a large scale. Strict action needs to be taken against the media houses and advertisements promoting Correct article usage
The media
culture
which leads to physical and mental disgrace. Steps Add an article
a culture
taken
by the local administration Add the auxiliary verb
were taken
such
as establishment
of Add an article
the establishment
public
sports complex to promote exercise, campaigns to educate Add an article
the public
people
about the horrendous effects of sedentary
lifestyle and consumption of certain things, can widely impact Correct article usage
a sedentary
in
bringing positive changes.
In a nutshell, by being considerate and aware Change preposition
apply
about
one’s actions, Change preposition
of
people
can change their perception towards their life choices and improve their overall well-being.Submitted by ieltsmaterialof on
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite