Scientists tell us that some activities are good for health and others are bad. Despite knowing that, millions of people still continue doing unhealthy activities. What are the causes and what are the solutions for this?

One of the greatest
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can have is good health. Some activities are beneficial and the rest are not, which is being actively advocated by the scientists.
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many
people
ignore
this
fact and continue doing activities that
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their health.
This
essay will discuss the causes and possible solutions for
such
an attitude.
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medical facilities, there
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plethora
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of reasons why
people
are suffering from various diseases. One of the major causes of
this
is the negligence of
healthy
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lifestyle.
Moreover
, lack of motivation and awareness
also
contributes
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people
not understanding the difference between healthy and unhealthy choices. Addiction to
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substances is
also
responsible for
such
behaviour as
people
feel helpless and tempted to get into
such
activities. For an instance,
people
addicted to smoking may argue that if they stop smoking
then
it could affect their performance and mood. Despite
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all
this
, there are certain solutions that can be adopted in order to tackle
this
problem.
Media
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needs to cover the complications of not having a healthy lifestyle on a large scale. Strict action needs to be taken against the media houses and advertisements promoting
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which leads to physical and mental disgrace. Steps
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by the local administration
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as
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of
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sports complex to promote exercise, campaigns to educate
people
about the horrendous effects of
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lifestyle and consumption of certain things, can widely impact
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bringing positive changes. In a nutshell, by being considerate and aware
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one’s actions,
people
can change their perception towards their life choices and improve their overall well-being.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • addiction
  • chemical reactions
  • dependency
  • social and cultural norms
  • convenience
  • accessibility
  • education and awareness campaigns
  • temptations
  • implementing policies
  • taxing
  • supportive environment
  • accountability
  • unhealthy habits
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