Successful sports professionals can earn a great deal more money than people in other important professions. Some people think this is fully justified while others think it is unfair. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
Many successful
sports
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professionals
earn more as compared to Use synonyms
people
working in other Use synonyms
professions
. While many agree that Use synonyms
comparatively
higher earning capacity of sportspersons is justifiable, others tend to differ. In Correct article usage
the comparatively
this
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of Change to a plural noun
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thoughts
and share my opinion.
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People
tend to side with the view that the Use synonyms
salaries
of Use synonyms
sports
players are justified because of the Use synonyms
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hard work
hard-
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hard work
work
that players put into their careers to Use synonyms
be reach
a successful stage. A sportsperson is said to be successful after consistent victories and winning a number of recognitions in terms of medals and trophies, and to reach Change the verb form
reach
this
stage, a player puts in years of hard Linking Words
work
and training. Use synonyms
Therefore
, when the hard Linking Words
work
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finally
pays off in terms of handsome Linking Words
salaries
and Use synonyms
complementary
benefits Correct your spelling
complimentary
such
as sponsorships, opportunity to become Linking Words
brand
ambassador of a number of consumer goods, it seems justifiable. Add an article
the brand
a brand
For example
, Mahinder Singh Dhoni, former captain of Linking Words
Indian
cricket team, was a middle-class railways worker who worked really hard to achieve his dream of being a successful cricketer and wealth followed after he bagged a number of victories for Add an article
the Indian
an Indian
Indian
cricket team in terms of national recognition by government and sponsorships of many multi-national companies.
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the Indian
On the other hand
, other Linking Words
professions
including Use synonyms
doctors
, army, teachers, bankers etc. are the true backbone of a country’s economy. These Use synonyms
professionals
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also
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work
tirelessly, including many years of education and investing a significant amount of money in their educations, in order to achieve their goal of becoming a certain professional. Use synonyms
In addition
to Linking Words
this
, Linking Words
such
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professionals
contribute directly to the economy of a country and providing their services to Use synonyms
general
masses on a daily basis. Correct article usage
the general
For instance
, Linking Words
doctors
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work
24×7 to treat Use synonyms
ill
and elderly, teachers educate Correct article usage
the ill
people
who eventually contribute to the development of a country and economists Use synonyms
make
economic policies Add the particle
to make
which
are a key to running a country smoothly. Correct pronoun usage
that
However
, the contributions of Linking Words
such
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professionals
are not entirely complemented by their Use synonyms
salaries
. A teacher, Use synonyms
for instance
, earns approximately Rs.15, 000-20,000 per month on average which is way less than a successful sportsperson. Linking Words
Therefore
, it can be said that other Linking Words
professions
’ Use synonyms
salaries
do not justify Use synonyms
for
their efforts.
In my opinion, the Change preposition
apply
salaries
of other Use synonyms
professionals
should be increased, if not matched to a successful Use synonyms
sports
player, to the extent that their efforts are well compensated. Use synonyms
This
is essential as the world can survive without successful Linking Words
sports
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professionals
but would be Use synonyms
a
chaos without good Correct article usage
apply
doctors
, scientists and teachers. The significance of good Use synonyms
doctors
and scientists was recently highlighted during the COVID-19 pandemic which Use synonyms
warrant
for Change the verb form
warrants
increase
in monetary benefits for Add an article
an increase
the increase
such
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professions
as compared to Use synonyms
Use synonyms
sports
Correct your spelling
sportspeople
people
. Use synonyms
In addition
to Linking Words
this
, I believe the government should come up with Linking Words
polices
to have a minimum starting fixed salary of a fresh graduate so that they can Correct your spelling
policies
fulfill
their daily needs and support their families comfortably.
In conclusion, I would say that Change the spelling
fulfil
sports
Use synonyms
professionals
put in a great deal of effort and money to become successful, Use synonyms
however
, other Linking Words
professions
contribute to the well-beingUse synonyms
,
and development of a nation on a daily basis. Remove the comma
apply
Therefore
, the Linking Words
salaries
of successful Use synonyms
sports
player Use synonyms
is
justified to some extent but other Change the verb form
are
professions
are more worthy of higher Use synonyms
salaries
and other monetary benefits.Use synonyms
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