The best way to solve the world’s environmental problems is to increase the cost of fuel. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Environmental Problems owing to the overconsumption of fossil fuels can be mitigated in a variety of ways .
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a certain fraction of people who believe that raising
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fuel prices is one way to go about it . In my opinion ,
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is not the most efficient manner on how to tackle
this
issue As we are all aware , we live in a highly
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world today
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I can say the whole world is a Global Village , whereby we are all dependent on each other for various
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and services which are made available to us on time due to the transportation
industry
and what is the most essential element of
this
industry
? Fossil fuels indeed .
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raising the prices of fuels can have a negative pact altogether whereby the transportation
industry
suffers our living standards will be depleted not to mention the fatal blow to the global economy as well. One way on how
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problem can be addressed is by imposing
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tax on Vehicles and
industry
whereby people are encouraged to reduce their carbon footprints on earth by encouraging car-pooling while going to work , taking up public transportation , asking people to ride bicycles while travelling short distances etc.
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countries need to spend adequately on the research and development of alternate modes of fuel
such
as wind energy ,tidal energy and solar energy whose impacts on our
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are less harmful and whose availability is not scarce.
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nations and individuals must collectively realise that we don’t have another planet to move to once we destroy our earth and take matters into their own hands for the preservation of our ecosystem by reducing their carbon usage.
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  • disproportionately affect
  • renewable sources
  • solar energy
  • equity in environmental policies
  • exacerbating social inequalities
  • incentivizing
  • subsidies
  • strict regulations
  • industrial emissions
  • sustainable local production
  • carbon footprints
  • punitive measures
  • sustainability efforts
  • robust and lasting changes
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