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School children are using computers in school more than ever. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of this and give your own opinion.

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With the advent of technology,
computers
 have become an essential part of human life including school children. It can be seen that
modren
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modern
 pupils are using more
computers
 as compared to the traditional one. In
this
 essay, I will discuss both pros and cons associated with
this
 trend.
To begin
 with, the
first
 and important
principal
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 advantage is ample facilities provided with the help of
computers
. It
provide
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 the service of audio-visual classes which helps the
students
 to understand and learn the concepts in
very
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 easy manner.
Moreover
, it
also
 helps to increase the knowledge of the
students
. There are many sites and websites available on the internet like Youtube, Videoder, E-papers which helps the
students
 to gain different intelligent skills.
Addionally
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Additionally
, in recent
time
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, due to
pandemic
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the pandemic
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 of Covid-19, all the studies are going only through the internet with using
computers
. So,
students
 do not need to go to schools
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 helps to provide
the
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 safe environment.
On the other hand
,
besides
 the upsides of
this
 trajectory, the drawback cannot be undermined.
Firstly
, constant work on
this
 cause
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type
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 of
eyes
problems
such
 as irritation in
eyes
, redness, low vision etc.
For example
, normally a person
blink
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 15-16 times in
a minutes
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a minute
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 but when we are working on
computers
we blink
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 only 2-3 times in
a minutes
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.
As a
result
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 it basis of dryness in
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 which long time
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our
eyes
.
Secondly
, it
also
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of
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 different health issues viz back pain, neck pain,
problems
 in bending, mental
problems
 etc.
Hence
,
students
 should not excessive use
of
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these technologies and
also
 not totally
depdend
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depend
dependent
 on
computers
. To conclude, based on the arguments given above,
computers
 give many benefits and limitations to the school
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children
childrens
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. It will harm
to
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the child of various physical and mental
problems
 and contrast it gives large benefits
such
 as increasing knowledge, save money, time and
upto
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up to
 date with technology.
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