In many countries it is now illegal to smoke in public places. It is only fair that people who wish to smoke should have to leave the building. Do you agree or disagree?
Multiple countries have adopted a new position regarding smoke in public areas, making it not allowed. Nations dictaminate
that is
only far for every citizen, that smokers should leave a space if they wish to enjoy a cigarette. This
essay slightly agrees with the new position adopted, to begin
with, I understand the rights of people
who want to enjoy a cigar in open spaces, even though in public areas. However
, I am aware of the risks related to cigarettes and how these impact people
around the smoker, especially children.
Firstly
, as I mentioned before, I understand smoker’s point of view, is their right to enjoy a cigarette in open spaces, such
as parks, lakes and natural environments. Of course, it should be taken into consideration by people
around and apply common sense, for instance
, a smoker should avoid smoke in a park beside a kinder garden. In these cases, smokers should understand and respect the bans.
On the other hand
, I am aware of the risks related to cigarettes, therefore
, this
essay agrees with the position taken by the countries. There is a concept called “Passive Smoking”, this
means that people
around a smoker (called "Passive smokers") will inhale the smoke, impacting negatively on their health as well. Is, mainly, for
this
reason, that I believe that smoking in public areas should be banned, especially, if there are children present.
To conclude
, even though I can understand the smoker’s rights, this
essay agrees with the ban. From my personal point of view, the drawbacks and negative aspects overweight the smoker’s wishes.Submitted by tomasmutilva99 on
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