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Many elderly people are no longer looked after by their families but are put in care homes or nursing homes. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this trend?

#people #families #care #homes #trend
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It is true that many
people
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 tend to let their old parents live in nursing
homes
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,
instead
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 of taking
care
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 of these elderly
people
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 at home. I would agree that
this
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 trend has both advantages and disadvantages, and there are some points below.
To begin
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 with the positives, the biggest advantage of nursing facilities for elderly
people
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 is that these places provide intensive
care
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.
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 is because
care
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homes
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 have professionally- trained staff who can provide appropriate meal diets or specialized healthcare.
Conversely
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, many
families
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 may only
care
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 for the elderly with regard to basic needs
such
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 as dressing, bathing, and eating.
Besides
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 special
care
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,
such
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 places usually organize leisure activities for the aged to take part in. Leisure clubs,
for example
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, are places where elderly
people
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 socialize and share their common interests with others, and these activities can help them feel a sense of community and befriend fellow
people
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.
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, sending old
people
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 to nursing
homes
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 often puts a financial strain on their
families
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. The reason for
this
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 is that the cost of nursing
care
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 is typically expensive, and some
families
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 can not afford the cost.
In contrast
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, if they look after old
people
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 at home, they might avoid
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 costs. Another issue is that old
people
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 must live away from their loved ones because their nursing facilities may be far from their
homes
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.
As a result
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, their relatives might only visit them at weekends or holidays, and
this
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 would mean they often lack family bonds and feel distressed. In conclusion,
although
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 nursing
homes
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 may offer specialized
care
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 and many community activities, they might be costly to cover and lacking in
families
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 presence.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Professional care
  • Medical attention
  • Trained staff
  • Social interaction
  • Combat loneliness
  • Safety and security
  • Relief for families
  • Loss of autonomy
  • Emotional impact
  • Cost
  • Financial strain
  • Quality of care
  • Neglect and abuse
  • Detachment from family
  • Mental wellbeing
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