Some people say television is useful for education, while others think it’s useful for entertainment. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Television
is one of the initial technologies which have brought development to human society. Some
people
think it is beneficial in terms of
entertainment
only, while I agree with those who think it is useful for
education
and others. In
this
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I will provide some examples to support my point of view. Most
people
think that
television
provides
entertainment
,
this
is because it is mostly known as a channel for watching soap operas.
For example
, according to the latest survey conducted by the Government Public Relations Department, it reveals that 80% of Thai
people
watch
TV
for relaxing reasons, and the statistic shows the highest rating during the soap opera time around 8.30 PM-10.30PM in every day.
Therefore
, watching
television
for relaxing reasons is the best
reasons
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reason
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for some
people
.
On the other hand
, some
people
think that it has another usefulness
such
as
education
terms. The most important reason is that
programs
on
TV
have various
purposes
whether
entertainment
,
education
, informed knowledge or advertisement.
For instance
,
TV
programs
such
as National Geographic or English for Fun
programs
would be for
education
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purposes
mainly
,
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but
also
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with
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to
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entertainment
at the same time.
Therefore
, I strongly believe that
TV
is not only useful for
entertainment
,
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but
also
has other benefits which depend on
people
could choose
suit
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to individual purpose.
Television
is
the
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a
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platform for many
purposes
which depend on the audiences'
purposes
.
Therefore
,
people
should choose to watch
programs
which suit
to
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their own purpose,
this
would be
great
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benefit of
television
if the audiences choose appropriately with the right purpose and time.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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