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Since the turn of the millennium, an increasing number of people have switched from reading traditional books to electronic media. What has caused this significant change and what are the results for children and adults?

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In modern-day society, more and more
people
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 have become more comfortable with viewing virtual media rather than physical
books
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.
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 explain the main reasons behind the switch and will
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, explain the effects
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 has on
children
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 and
adults
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.
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, switching to digital reading can be caused by various different reasons, one being: the vast variety of
books
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 to choose from.
People
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 will have a better selection of online material to pick from, rather than having to purchase hard copies of the same version(if not older).
Children
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 nowadays have started using online
resources
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 to help them academically. Grown-ups would
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 have more
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 they can look up instantly without having to search around for specific
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,
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 can even reduce time consumption.
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, news channels have stated that statistically, there has been
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 73% increase in demand for gadgets due to easy access to a bunch of
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 on the internet.
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, the effect of moving to electronic media is that
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 both
children
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 and
adults
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 have become too dependent on devices.
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 can lead to folks becoming more addicted to technology, which can have a negative impact on most
people
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.
Children
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 can be swamped with choices that can get them carried away from their main purpose of
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Adults
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 may find false information since there
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 many different sources of information on devices. The addiction can
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 result in health issues,
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 as
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 headaches or eyestrains due to long hour screen-time. In conclusion, the transfer to digital
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 can cause students to have more variety of
books
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 to learn from and
adults
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 to have more
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 to work with. The effect
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 can have on
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maybe
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 addiction or health issues. To prevent
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, there should be cautionary action whilst using technology, especially for
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 hours during the day.

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  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – Problems
  • Body paragraph 2 – Solutions
  • Conclusion

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