Some people choose to eat no meat of fish. They believe that this is not only better for their own health but also benefits the world as a whole. Discuss this view and give your own opinion.

It is undeniable that some
people
at the present became interested in not eating
meat
or fish because they think that it is
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better for their health and
environment
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the environment
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around the world. From my point of view,
although
this
idea can offer more and more benefits to society, there can
also
present some drawbacks to the world. In the following paragraph, the reasons to support my opinion will be outlined in the detail. On the one hand, I think that the consumption
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some
meat
,
such
as shark fin, in some countries, like China, can
cause
negative impacts
for
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the environment of the world due to it is a dramatic decrease of the shark populations in the ocean.
Additionally
, many
people
who do not eat
meat
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of
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fish believe that many
meats
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types of meat
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can create a lot of fat which are
not
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no
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benefits
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for them, and it can
cause
illness in their body,
for example
, the Avian Influenza
form
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the chickens. When they eat chickens which are
this
influenza, they will
sick
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are dead.
On the other hand
, I think that
this
idea
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good for
people
and
ecosystem
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the ecosystem
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due to
firstly
,
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humans are designed to eat
meat
and vegetation to create protein and
mineral
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minerals
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which can help them to maintain their
body
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bodies
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.
Secondly
,
meat
consumption is creating the ecological balance of the globe because the ecosystem must have predators and
pray
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prey
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which are the important components in the biological system.
Furthermore
, many nutrients from real
meat
are
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better than some vitamins that are taken to replace
meat
by some persons. In conclusion, I strongly believe that refusing to eat
meat
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of some
people
can
cause
many advantages for them and the ecosystem, but there may
cause
some
disadvantage
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disadvantages
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for their
body
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bodies
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in the future. The malnutrition disease,
for instance
.
Therefore
, it is recommended that if you want to reject to eat
meat
, you will have to carefully study its advantages and disadvantages.
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