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Nowadays, people of all ages from certain parts of the world spend most of the time at home rather than going outdoors. Discuss the reasons, is this negative or positive development?

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The question of where to spend our free
time
 has long been debated. Some people believe that staying indoors is the best use of their
time
, whereas others feel that engaging in outdoor
activities
 are better. While the optimal use of free
time
 is subjective, I think it is better to spend more
time
 outside the
home
. It is easy to understand why many choose to relax at
home
 nowadays. With the
ever increasing
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 competition, numerous people work long and exhausting hours in order to ensure job security or
a
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promotion. When the working day is done, most would choose to return
home
 and rest, rather than head out to play sports or meet friends.
This
 is made even more attractive by the advances in entertainment technology, with most homes having a plethora of devices
which
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 help you unwind. From High Definition televisions to
next generation
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 computer consoles, our homes offer a wide range of
activities
 to help us pass the
time
. Even so, the reliance on technology as a way to relax is not without its consequences. Spending
time
 at
home
 doing sedentary
activities
 will increase the risk of developing associated health problems,
such
 as obesity, high blood pressure, and diabetes.
Additionally
, using your computer as a means of communication and entertainment is likely to weaken the bonds you share with family, friends, and
neighbors
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, leading to
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 in social cohesion.
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 outside mitigate both of these potential risks, as light exercise will keep you in good health and social interactions strengthen the relationships we have with others while offering mutual enjoyment. While it is reasonable to want to spend
time
 at
home
 in order to recharge your batteries after a long day at work, it is important to make
time
 for more social
activities
 too.
This
 will not only have a great effect on your social life but
also
 improve your overall health and well-being.
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