Many people today choose to take part in extreme sports (e.g. skydiving, rock climbing). Why do you think people want to do these sports? Who do you think should pay if people injure themselves while doing an extreme sport?

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take up dangerous

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are so popular.

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enjoy extreme

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because they experience adrenaline and new emotions.

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, it helps them understand their own limits.

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like skiing and rock climbing are, indeed, very popular now, and of course,

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like them. It is very interesting to watch ski and other competitions on TV, but it is more interesting to participate in them.

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, my friend began practising snowboarding because he saw a competition and decided it was very cool. He thinks that it is the best hobby for him.

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, many individuals ask who should pay if they break something. Some

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think that if they injure themselves, the athletics centre where they are training should pay for the mistakes.

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, if the equipment is old, the centre must pay. Others think that if

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choose a dangerous hobby, they should pay for it themselves. Both sides are right;

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, it depends on the situation. In my own experience, when I hurt my leg on

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a slope, the centre paid for my surgery because it was their fault. In conclusion, I want to say that extreme activities are exciting and very interesting, and it is not bad

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, but so dangerous. I believe that

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should understand what they are doing.

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way, we can enjoy our hobbies and not worry about money too much

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Jan 7, 2025

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It gives reasons for taking part in extreme sports and a view on who pays.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 7.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 7.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

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4 paragraphs

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