Some people believe that it is important to give gifts and presents to friends and family to show that we care about them. Others think that there are better ways to show that we care about them. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Gifts

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a very specific topic to discuss because we have a lot of opinions about

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, today I'd like to discuss only to opinions

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people

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who give presents to

show

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care

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about

famili

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family

or friends and

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the

other one is

peoples

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people

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who think that they know better ways to

show

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care

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. First of

all

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I'd like to mention

peoples

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people

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who give gifts for each

holiday's

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and makes them happy, but

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approach

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a negative side,

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example

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peoples

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people

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can love you only for a presents, and that means in the situation if you

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all your money

people

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leave you alone, and you'll be with

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your

problem face to face,

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it will be more difficult

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impress

people

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again, again, and again

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They will need more

expansive

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expensive

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presents every time, and you can

spent

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everything on gifts, but I think when you can't meet with your friends or family if they

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for

fot

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for

example, simple presents will be the

most

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best

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possible way to

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them

care

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the other ways to

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your

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and love to other

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people's

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can be various,

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example

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you can invite them to dinner or invite

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them to

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visit

interesting

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the interesting

an interesting

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place,

i'ts

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it's

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best option to

show

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your

care

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because you can

spent

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more time with them and

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get the good memories about

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day. You can take

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photos from

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day, and check them from year to year, remembering how interesting was

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day, and discuss it again and again.

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coherence cohesion

For coherence and cohesion, focus on improving the logical flow by using more linking phrases and organizing your ideas into clear paragraphs. This will help guide the reader through your argument smoothly.

introduction conclusion

The essay begins with a clear statement discussing the topic of giving gifts, which sets the stage for a focused discussion.

supported main points

You provide examples of both viewpoints, which shows a balanced treatment of the prompt.

Fully explain your ideas

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Sentence 1 - Background statement
Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
Sentence 3 - Thesis
Sentence 4 - Outline sentence

Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph

Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
Sentence 2 - Example
Sentence 3 - Discussion
Sentence 4 - Conclusion

Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph

Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
Sentence 2 - Example
Sentence 3 - Discussion
Sentence 4 - Conclusion

Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

Sentence 1 - Summary
Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
3
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meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

3 paragraphs

251 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

Tangible symbols
Affection
Materialism
Cultural traditions
Impact
Relationships
Quality time
Acts of service
Communication
Shared experiences
Equating
Emotional presence
Physical presence
Material possessions

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Some people believe that it is important to give gifts and presents to friends and family to show that we care about them. Others think that there are better ways to show that we care about them. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Fully explain your ideas

some experts believe that it is better for children to begin learning a foreign language at primary school rather than secondary . Do the advantages outweigh the disavantages?

Write a letter to a book store manager who is living in another city. Ask him/her to make available a book that you are interested in. In your letter, you should tell: – What book you are looking for? – Why you need this book? – How you plan to purchase the book?

Some people think that global environment problems should be dealt with internationally. Others, however, believe that they have to be tackled domestically. What is your opinion?

The importance of biodiversity is being more widely recognized as increasing numbers of species come under threat. What can be done to maintain biodiversity? Why is species loss occurring? What is the potential effect of this?

You are experiencing financial problems and want to ask your landlord if you can pay your rent late. Write a letter to your landlord. In your letter explain: Why you are writing to him Why you cannot pay the rent When you will pay the rent.