Some people believe that it is important to give gifts and presents to friends and family to show that we care about them. Others think that there are better ways to show that we care about them. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Some
people
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believe that it is important to give gifts and presents to friends and family to
show
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their
love
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. To be honest, our traditions transparent the same point of view.
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, we have various
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of different staff for Christmas, New Year, St. Valentine's Day, Easter, International
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Day and so on. Indeed,
people
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do not need all
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things, but social media and marketing encourage
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to buy more and more. I believe, that two pairs of shoes for one season are quite enough, but I have more
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10 pairs. New collections with small changes appear each season or even in
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midseason as well. As we know, there are five languages of
love
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. One of them is presents. For some
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, it is very important to receive gifts and presents. But not for all.
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my point of view, it is better to ask or try to figure out how you can
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your
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and
care
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to
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person.
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, I would be grateful to receive
some
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ticket to
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concert, theatre or exhibition
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and, certificate
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certificate
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a certificate
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to
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the bookstore or cosmetologist. I am on my way to minimalism, so it's really annoying to receive some random things which I don't need.
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, the best way to
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your
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is communication. When you really
care
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about the person you will do your best to find out what is her or his language of
love
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.
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this
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you will be able to decide how to
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your feelings. In any case, even
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a bad
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present is better
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then
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nothing, because it shows that you
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about somebody.

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The essay presents a balanced view and expresses personal opinion well.
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There are interesting examples that illustrate personal preferences and ideas.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

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‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Tangible symbols
  • Affection
  • Materialism
  • Cultural traditions
  • Impact
  • Relationships
  • Quality time
  • Acts of service
  • Communication
  • Shared experiences
  • Equating
  • Emotional presence
  • Physical presence
  • Material possessions
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