Some people believe that it is important to give gifts and presents to friends and family to show that we care about them. Others think that there are better ways to show that we care about them. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

It is well known
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humans
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like to receive gifts.
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, when it
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care of
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they tend to lag
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and
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their duty to pay them back. I would call it reciprocity, so you treat your relatives the way they
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you
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is understandable and fair. Gifts could be tangible or intangible, whether it is
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a commodity
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or
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doesn't matter. What matters is attitude, dedication, time spent together, usefulness and helpfulness of their deeds.
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way you contribute to
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a relationship plays a pivotal role
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in building
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long-lasting
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to keep strong bonds throughout decades. I consider
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back to the person who made me happy at one point in time with the same token of appreciation.
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, if they purchased me a nice commodity worth
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couples
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hundred
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dollars, I am enthusiastic to give it back and show respect by making a person happy with
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a long-awaited
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item from
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their wishlist
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similar
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of similar
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value.
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, some people may give you a hand when you are desperate or by helping when you need it the most, or may provide
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an opportunity no money could buy.
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, it may be access to some sort of enclosed spot,
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event held once in a lifetime, climb
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you to find an enticing view
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the top of the mountain
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. Taking all thoughts into consideration, I would have to say no matter what you choose
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just take care of the
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who surround you, your family, your close
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relatives
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the time. I do recall there was a saying: 'Life is what you add to the river - not what you get out of it'. I am leaning more towards giving gifts when I can to make one happy, to show my appreciation, to let them know how valuable they are to me.

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task response
Be clear in the start. Say your main view in the first lines. Then add ideas and facts to back it up. Do not switch ideas in the middle.
coherence and cohesion
Make the body in two or three clear parts. Each part should have one idea and a small example. Use simple link words like first, next, also, but, so, however to help flow.
task response
Use one easy example that shows your point. Try to link it to your view with a short sentence.
writing style
Use shorter sentences. Short lines are easier to read and understand.
content
You show you want to talk about both sides.
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You give your own view at the end.
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You try to add an example and idea of care.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
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    • Sentence 1 - Summary
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Tangible symbols
  • Affection
  • Materialism
  • Cultural traditions
  • Impact
  • Relationships
  • Quality time
  • Acts of service
  • Communication
  • Shared experiences
  • Equating
  • Emotional presence
  • Physical presence
  • Material possessions
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