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Many adults nowadays prefer spending their free time playing computer games. Why do they do this? Is this a positive or negative development?

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We live in a world where modern technology and high tech products have been highly influenced and available everywhere. Survival without being addicted to new techs and
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 are not that easy for humans. At present, lots of grownups would like to accommodate the extra
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 in front of monitors playing
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. I highly oppose
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. Computerised
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 were introduced decades back. By the
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 it has been modernised and almost every person born in after the 1980s got addicted. But being an adult can we justify stick to the computers? Being a grownup comes with plenty of responsibilities. As an example, if a parent entertains himself with an Xbox, he would have missed being a responsible father to his kids. Not only that, he may have passed that notorious habit to his kids and already created another irresponsible person for the nation.
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, video
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 are freely available and easy to download to laptops, mobile phones and note pads. Even though it helps to release stress, the chances to get addicted are higher. And
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, people play
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 while they commute to work and on their breaks. But if they could use that free
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 to educate themselves about the present world, it could be more useful for them. We live in the 21st century, where the world changes every
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. Extra reading always helps every person. In conclusion, adults play
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 because they are addicted or to relieve their stress.
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, if they utilised their free
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 for more productive work, they could be more useful to the nation.
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