Many products that we buy are made in other countries. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of this trend.

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In
globalised
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the globalised
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world, there are numerous
products
such
as Washing machines,
Smart phones
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Smartphones
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, LCD’s that we are purchasing in
daily
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our daily
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routine,
are
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which are
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produced by other nations.
This
trend can affect both the unemployment and profitability of our nation. In
this
essay, I will discuss both the pros and cons associated with
this
trend.
To begin
with,
first
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and most important advantage
is provides
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is provided
is providing
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happiness to the individual life. If the persons used imported
goods
it helps to raise the standard of living. There are
majority
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the majority
a majority
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of the devices which give quality in
products
.
For instance
, we want to buy electronic
products
of Japan, because we all know Japan quality of
goods
is much higher than other countries, the reason behind is that
this
country
has more expertness in technology.
Moreover
, imported
goods
helps
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help
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to build good industrial relation with
other
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another country
other countries
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country
.
Hence
, trade among different nations helps to bring harmony among them
On the other hand
,
besides
the upsides of
this
trajectory, the drawback cannot be undermined.
Firstly
, the national income of our
country
is reducing because people mostly spend
products
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on products
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which are made by other countries.
Secondly
, foreign
products
are very expensive which everyone cannot be affordable.
In addition
, it
also
cause
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causes
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the rise in
unemployment
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the unemployment
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rate in our nation, for the sake of
large
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a large
the large
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number of small
businesses
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,businesses
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shut the door due to
non selling
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non-selling
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of
goods
.
Although
, it may be the result of
reduce
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reducing
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job opportunities in our
country
. To conclude, foreign
goods
are essential which give many benefits to human beings but it
also
result
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results
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of many problems like high prices,
decrease
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decreases
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job vacancies etc. So, we should not all depend upon these
products
and
also
buy
products
which are produced in our nation.
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