Some people believe that computers are more a hindrance than a help in today's world. Others feel that they are such indispensable tools that they would not be able to live or work without them. In what ways are computers a hindrance? What is your opinion? Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

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nowadays is influenced by a connection in communication,
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industry development, and
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artificial
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(AI).
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are a crucial
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is used to create and control all of those
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.
In contrast
, there are some
people
who believe that
computers
are a hindrance to drive the
world
,
in particular
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mostly
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people
who always
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computers
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face
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a health problem and lacking
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concentration, or some negative information and comments.
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both these views.
To begin
with, numerous
people
feel that
computers
take an
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roll
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to
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world
development as they are a
tool
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provide
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creation of
people
and help
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to create new things.
Computers
are
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a source
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of information which
people
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variety
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of data, used as a
tool
to type orders and systems in manufacturing, and used as programs to help
people
solve both complex and general problems by AI. These prove that
computers
are a key to drive and help today’s
world
.
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computer
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computers
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also
affect
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human
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humans
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in negative ways. Many
people
have health problems because they
use
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the computer
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computer
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computers
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too much:
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muscle pain,
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drying eyes
problem
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, and
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office syndrome.
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, there are many
people
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who change
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their
personality
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such
as they have a lower empathy and shorter concentrate on something.
Lastly
,
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impact of
computer
occur
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in
communication
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the communication
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field.
For example
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cyberbullying
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cyber bullying
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cyberbullying
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, inaccurate information or fake news, and unsuitable
contents
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for children. These are reasons
led
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some
people
believe
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that
computers
are a hindrance
of
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today’s
world
. To sum up,
computers
are a crucial
tool
which is used to drive the
world
,
although
some
people
believe these are a hindrance, but
this
because they
use
them in a wrong way. I think we need
computers
to help us develop today’s
world
.
Moreover
,
people
who believe
computer
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is an obstacle, they will change their mind if they
use
it correctly.
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