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Online classes make conventional classrooms unnecessary. To what extend do you agree/disagree

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As the Internet increases inexorably
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 years, e-learning has
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 a topic of interest. Many people believe that virtual learning can completely replace the traditional classroom because of its advance and convenience. While
this
 thinking is valid
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 extent, I believe that online courses are still questionable at best and cannot take the place of
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 classroom model.
To begin
 with, learning through online platforms have admittedly several benefits for
students
.
Firstly
, e-learning is cost-efficient because it does not require a brick-and-mortar location.
As a result
,
students
 could reduce the burden of facilities fees.
Moreover
, online courses can help their learners overcome time constraints and geographical boundaries, especially in the pandemic situation
such
 as COVID-19 when many
students
 are not allowed to enter foreign countries.
However
, despite the aforementioned benefits, I believe that
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 of web-based learning are more glaring. The
first
 drawback is that virtual learning can engender some valid concerns regarding
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examination cheating and
students
’ conduct. It would be a challenge for teachers to control their pupils only through technological devices and
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environment
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. Another pronounced disadvantage is the lack of many elements that only
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a physical
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classroom
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 can provide
students
. Learning online would limit the inextricably physical interaction in classes, which could lead to the degradation of
students
’ interest and even interpersonal skills
such
 as teamwork, idea discussion or communication in the long term.
Moreover
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 and equipment
such
 as science, or physics need to be hosted face to face in order to provide
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genuine experience. In conclusion, while the obvious benefits make e-learning seem a good idea, I believe that the given disadvantages would not help it become a worthwhile choice.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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