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Some people say that protecting the environment is the government’s responsibility. Others believe that every individual should be responsible for it. Discuss both views and give your own opinion?

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Environmental issues indeed are one of the prevalent phenomena nowadays which results in polarized
opinion
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 among society. Many people believe that either
government
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 or every individual is responsible for protecting the natural
environment
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.
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, I believe that there is a dire need for both parties to take collective assertiveness to safeguard the natural
environment
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.
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 with, it is often argued that the
government
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 should implement strict laws and penalties to safeguard natural
resources
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.
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, it should impose heavy duties and taxes on the extraction of natural
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 and encourages the use of renewable sources of energy like solar, wind and hydro energies.
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, it is
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 argued that individuals must protect the
environment
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 by limiting the unnecessary use of natural
resources
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 which are plaguing our planet. Activities like wastage of natural drinking water, burning of fuels, deforestation and excess hunting by humans are rapidly outpacing the planets ability to absorb those damages which result in the increasing the rate of deterioration globally.
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, I believe that it is the dire responsibility of both the
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 and every individual to take collective measures to protect our natural
resources
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.
Government
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 policies and rules are incomplete and ineffective if it is not implemented and supported by the individual.
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, the
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 has made a strict law against the usage of plastic bags in Delhi.
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, people are least bother about the hazardous effects of plastic on the
environment
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 and
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 they use it on a large scale. After analyzing the above scenario, it is not very hard to come to the consensus that it is not only the responsibility of a single stakeholder but
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 both
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 and individual must protect their
environment
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 by taking radical actions.
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