Some people think that formal education should start for children as early as possible, while others think that it should not start until 7 years of age. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

It is commonly believed that children should start their attendance in
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earlier, while others argue that younger ones should be kept at home or kindergarten
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timely. I believe that
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6 or even 5
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is sufficient to study. The essay will
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look at children's development and after will discuss
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how it is partially harmful. On the one hand, schools gave
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, so understanding it as earlier as possible is advantageous. Humankind can develop by themselves, but with
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teacher and surrounded
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it will be easy.
For instance
, my youngest brother went to school at
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, there are differences in understanding and learning processes, He had learned some writing skills, which is impossible for some people at that age.
On the other hand
, childhood should be more entertaining than anything else,
such
as working or especially studying too. Involving beforehand could give some disadvantages for well-being. Some people
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to being nervous, while experiencing with
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amount of information. To sum up, engaging to study earlier can give good results for their future, at the same time may cause health issues for them. I can say that
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earlier is beneficial for children and it outweighs any drawbacks.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Cognitive development
  • Social interactions
  • Formative years
  • Curiosity
  • Structured environments
  • Preschool activities
  • Unstructured play
  • Developmental pace
  • Emotional and social skills
  • Undue stress and pressure
  • Natural development
  • Informal learning methods
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