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Missions to explore space are hugely expensive, and there are problems on Earth which demand attention. The number of these missions needs to be reduced. Do you agree or disagree?

#missions #space #earth #demand #attention
These days exploring space is
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have a great impact on
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 and may solve the issues on earth.While others believe that if we
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 any support tell now it may risk leaving organisms.
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 we don't reach enough
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knowledge
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easy
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 I will discuss both sides and I will draw my personal conclusion.
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 hand, some
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unknown
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 things as it is a
people
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find
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 another planet like
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 prove that Mars has the same
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characteristics
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 earth. May we
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find
people
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living
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easily deal our issues and it will not be a loss.So, that's why some think that exploring space is
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beneficial
.
On the other hand
, we may lose our
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resources
 and we can not solve our current problems.
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, we may lose both. To illustrate , every leaving organism has its own
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 and we could not create it again. Like there is a gap in the ozone layer .
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 it
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 all of us as it
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from
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 the
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carbon dioxide
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to
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oxygen
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decreases
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death.
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 proves clearly that the current
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resource
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vanish
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 both views. I believe that being in the
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