Some people think that the news media nowadays have influenced people's lives in negative ways. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

The advent of new technology has brought a great many opportunities to spread
news
not only locally but
also
globally. Despite the fact that many
people
consider that the press
media
has an adverse impact on individuals' lives, I hardly support
this
notion as it provides safety and wellbeing of
people
.
To begin
with, nobody can deny that
the
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news
sources play an important role
for
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providing
security
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the security
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of
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mankind. Spreading
news
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the news
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about criminals
such
as robbery, murder or kidnapping , the mass
media
raises the cautiousness of society.
Furthermore
, having informed natural calamities like
earthquake
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,
storm
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storms
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, flooding, tsunami or others,
people
start to seek
for
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preventive measures,
This
is proven by statistics that showed a larger percentage of
people
's lives and properties were saved due to the Weather forecasts.
Thus
, the
media
news
have
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a contribution
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contribution
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safety
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of humankind.
Moreover
, another essential contribution of the daily
news
is promoting
welfare
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the welfare
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of the public. Because it is hard to accept that ordinary citizens are likely to meet official authorities
such
as
president
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the president
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, political leaders or others, the
news
channels and newspapers are the main tools for delivering messages about citizen's
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or difficulties to appropriate authorities.
For example
, in my home
country
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many
ordinary
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ordinaries
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are
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receiving supports from the government
as a result
of social networking bloggers' actions.
Therefore
, the
media
is one of the stimulator
factor
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for
improvement
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the improvement
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of
people
's quality of life. In conclusion, I reiterate the importance of the
news
media
for society in terms of security and
promotion
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the promotion
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of wellbeing.
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