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One of the best ways to save environmental problems is to increase the cost of fuel for cars and other vehicles. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

#cost #fuel #cars #vehicles
Air contamination is one of the environmental issues that has become widespread all over the world. It is considered that the best method to solve
this
 problem is to raise petrol prices and other kinds of vehicles. Despite I agree with
this
 solution which might be useful to some extent, there are
also
 other ways to resolve
this
 problem which are equally helpful.
This
 essay will give arguments on my point of view. It is irrefutable fact that by increasing
costs
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 of fuel and cars, it will be able to reduce environmental pollution.
This
 is because people will prefer cheaper ways to reach the destination over high-priced cars and
taxi
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taxis
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.
Hence
, there would be
less
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 vehicles on roads
which
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that
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 release harmful emissions, but there would be more bikes.
For instance
, there are high taxes on oil and
transport
 in West Europe, so local people often use bikes or walk by themselves. So, governments are able to control ecological contamination.
On the other hand
, there are
an
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alternative ways to solve the issue. One major method is to advance
public
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transport
 system and provide suitable infrastructure for it. If dwellers have the option to travel via cheap and convenient buses and trams, they will use them on daily basis.
Therefore
, it will result in
fewer
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a fewer
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number of
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transports on roads and highways since public
transport
 is more spacious and capable to carry many passengers simultaneously.
As
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for example
, London has its own huge underground network of metro, and locals are interested in moving by trains. To elucidate, environmental problems can
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me
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be
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 controlled by raising prices on gasoline, but there are
also
 different measures
such
 as strengthening public
transport
 and allowing people to use it
instead
 of cars.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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