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Some people believe that bicycles are the best mode of transport in the cities, while others disagree. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of both view and give your opinion.

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It is believed that
bicycle
 is eco-friendly, healthy and cheapest kind of transport.
However
, another part of
people
 disagrees with
this
 statement.
This
 essay will discuss both arguments in
further
 paragraphs.
First
 of all,
riding
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the riding
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bicycle
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a bicycle
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 has a
lot
 of advantages,
such
 as
eco-friendly
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being eco-friendly
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 and low cost. The metropolises have a
lot
 of traffic jams and
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the problem
a problem
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problem
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problems
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 with ecology. The
green-house
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greenhouse
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 effect is
most
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the most
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 dangerous
problem
 to citizens and
this
problem
 will be solved by simple
bicycles
.
Moreover
,
bicycles
 are too cheap. If
people
 start
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to use
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use
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using
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 that, they can save
an
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apply
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amount
money
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of money
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.
People
 are spending a
lot
 of money
to
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on
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 cars
,
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apply
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 because it is including taxes, car fixing and
cost
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the cost
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 of gas.
Also
,
bicycles
 are important for
people
 health, especially for
office
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the office
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 worker, who is sitting a main part of
day
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the day
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.
Simple
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A simple
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workout
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workouts
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 can treat and save from obesity and problems with blood circulation.
In
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On
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the other
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other hand
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another hand
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, riding
bicycles
 is dangerous. If cities have more urbanized roads, the number of road incidents will decrease permanently, but now
bicycle
 is one of
dangerous
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a dangerous
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 type of transportation. A lack of cities does not have
infrastructure
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the infrastructure
an infrastructure
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 for
bicycles
,
such
 as storage places. In the
last
, it is not comfortable like
motorbike
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a motorbike
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, and
exhausted
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an exhausted
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 rider will be tired by
physical
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the physical
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 load. In my opinion
bicycle
 good choice for metropolis citizens, it is cheap and does not
crate
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create
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 greenhouse gases, which destroy the local ecology. In conclusion,
bicycle
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the bicycle
a bicycle
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 has a
lot
 of advantages, like as low cost, ecofriendly and healthy.
However
, there has a
lot
 of
problem
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problems
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 with using
bicycles
.
For example
, the
high
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a high
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 chance of road
incident
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incidents
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 and cities do not have
an
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apply
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enough level of
infrastructures
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infrastructure
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 for comfortable bike using.
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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
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