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Some people think that they can make as much noise as they want, while others think that the amount of noise people make should be strictly controlled. ​ Discuss both views and include your own opinion and examples.

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It is considered by some
people
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 that making
noise
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 is normal
behavior
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, whereas
others
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 hold the view that the social attitude should be controlled. While
society
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 should take
in
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into
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an
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apply
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account all
people
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’s
right
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rights
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 and
choice
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choices
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, I believe that bothering and annoying
others
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 is unacceptable in
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crowded places. On one hand,
society
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 is the place where
people
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 can do whatever they want.
People
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 in
the
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public places should not worry about
others
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’ opinions or views about the things that they prefer. Because in
society
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, there are no interdictions about the
noise
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 that
people
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 make. And
also
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, it is the right of every individual to do
the
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an
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 activity that has importance for them.
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,
people
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, especially youngsters sing across the street which makes the elders to be bothered or annoyed because of their song genre.
That is
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 why
,
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 they do not let them sing near their houses and apartments. In fact, singing in front of
people
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 is the choice that teenagers want to do in public places to make
others
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 enjoy
too
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it too
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.
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,
although
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society
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 is a public area, distracting
others
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 and making them annoyed is not considerable.
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, there are a lot of
people
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 who speak loud with someone by telephone when they are
in
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on
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a public transport
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public transport
a means of public transport
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. It exasperates
others
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 making them feel
uncomfortableness
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uncomfortable
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.
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, recently my aunt was irritated by
car
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the car
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 washing organization which is located
next
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 to her house. The
noise
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 that they make in the middle of the night do not let her baby
to
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sleep enough as the sound of water, loudly speaking
people
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 and cars’ signals interrupt sleep.
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, despite the fact that my aunt
contact
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 the government and the car washing place, there is no solution as the organization has had permission to work whenever they want. All things considered,
although
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society
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 is the place for every person, who can do whatever they want, the
noise
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 pollution that makes
people
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 feel discomfort should be managed.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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