In some countries, a high proportion of criminal acts are committed by teenagers. Why has this happened? What can be done to deal with this?

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committed by teenagers is a burning issue. It has increased at an alarming rate. A high

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by young people in many countries. Apparently, modernization and westernization are to be blamed for

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, it can be reduced if precautionary measures are taken appropriately. To commence with, the two main factors for

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are circumstances they are grown as

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and the other is Impact of movies.

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, young people

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is developed from childhood with the situations they grow up with, as they give

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impact on their

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resulting in rude

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, according to a study the number of youth convicts got interviewed because to know the reason behind their act of crime, resulting in

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abuse to them by their parents.

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, movies

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impact on viewers especially adolescent minds, and they started to portray criminals as

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got diverted and directed in a wrong way and started to behave indecently and are started to commit

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as similar in movie characters imagining them as

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, the potential way to curb

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abuse. Government should take appropriate actions to reduce

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abuse by implementing strict laws.

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parents.

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board, there should be another board to scrutiny the characters of the movies so that they will stop portraying the criminal characters as lead roles. In conclusion, society along with

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should take steps to prevent

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problem from deteriorating

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. Even with some

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permanent solution for

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problem is still out of reach.

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