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Given is the table that illustrates the proportion of people by
age
 groups in one particular town who rode
bicycles
 in 2011. Overall, it can be deduced from the table that the percentage of
bike
 riders in the smallest
age
group
 from 0 to 9 was prevalent while the opposite was true for that from 40 to 59 in the research period.
In addition
, there were more women who rode
bicycles
 than men did of all ages. As can be seen from the chart, the figure for girls riding a
bike
 in 2011 was reported at 51.4%, which is slightly higher than that for boys.
Similarly
, the percentage of female children from 10 years old to 17 years old who were
bike
 riders was much more significant than that of male children, which was 24.6%. Look at the table in more detail, we can see the over 18
age
 groups witnessed a considerable decrease in the proportion of people riding
bicycles
. The
age
group
 from 40 to 59 ranked
last
 which was recorded at 12.3% at female and 9.7% at the opposition. Meanwhile, the oldest
group
 who are over 60 years old had 18.5% women rode a
bike
, while the figure for men was 13.2%. The
last
group
 from 18 to 39
also
 saw a higher proportion of women riding
bicycles
 than that of men, which accounted for only 9.7%.
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