Some people believe that travelling is a valuable experience; others say it is a waste of time and money.

Some
people
consider that having a tour to the different countries to see fascinating places is
opportunity
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to open the mind, while another group
people
think that travelling
require
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a huge budget and energy. Spending
vacation
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a vacation
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to trip is the same with force yourself to do what you can't afford, but I believe that travelling
give
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a
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you a
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chance
explore
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the world. On the one hand, there are
people
who prefer to stay at home and get
an
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enjoyment from things that
not
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do not
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require energy and effort. Definitely, travel is what they unlike to doing and they predict that
this
type of vacation
have
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a
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high consumption. A good example of
this
is freelancers, free graphic is the best part of their job and they can both work and relax.
Thus
, they don’t need extra days for
traveling
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travelling
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that consist
a
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of a
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waste of energy and money.
On the other hand
, some
people
want to travel and explore everything around and
it’s not depends
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on their capital and the amount of time to trips. Exactly, these
people
know how to get
a
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apply
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priceless emotions and moments to the whole life, every picture in travelling have a place in the memory.
For instance
,
choice
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a choice
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that was chosen by my sister was
travelling
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to travel
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every month to different places, she is
stewardess
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a stewardess
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. Absolutely, she get
a novel experiences
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a novel experience
novel experiences
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and saw various buildings and she said that she gets everything from life. In conclusion,
although
trips make
people
to
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apply
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spend time, effort and money,
but
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this
investment
to
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in
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your life
worth
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is worth
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it and give unforgettable moments to each.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • broadens horizons
  • cultural exposure
  • tolerance
  • self-reliance
  • overcoming challenges
  • language proficiency
  • sustainable tourism
  • environmental footprint
  • cultural homogenization
  • commercialization
  • responsible travel
  • global understanding
  • eco-friendly practices
  • accessible alternatives
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