Some people believe that children that commit crimes should be punished. Others think the parents should be punished instead. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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It is argued by some people that
children
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should be responsible for their offences.
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, others believe that the
parents
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of these
children
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should be punished. I tend to be in favour of the latter opinion and in
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I will explore both views and explain my point of view. It is obvious that everybody should be accountable for their own
behaviour
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and should be penalized in case of their wrongdoing.
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, we could be in a dilemma when
crimes
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are
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by
children
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. On the one hand, if
children
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commit
crimes
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they should be punished because it is likely to prevent them from the next offences.
On the contrary
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, if
children
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avoid penalties, they would not be able to realize the full
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of
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issue and its consequences. Undoubtedly, the main purpose of punishment is to demonstrate that you will be punished in case of your perpetration.
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exemption from punishment would lead to
children
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repeating
crimes
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.
On the other hand
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,
children
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are not adults, and perhaps they do not understand the full seriousness of wrong
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. I'm sure that
parents
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are completely responsible for their
children
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in terms of their upbringing
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their
behaviour
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.
For example
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, when a child steals a cellphone from his classmate, it is likely the
parents
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of
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child failed to explain to them that theft is
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extremely
wrong
behaviour
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and
this
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would lead them to prison.
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, when
parents
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get out of touch with their
children
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, or even worse, set an example of wrong
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,
it is clear that
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they should
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carry full responsibility for themselves and for their
children
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. In conclusion,
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children
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should realize all repercussions of their offences,
nonetheless
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, the ultimate responsibility for kids' wrongdoing lies with their
parents
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,
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who
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were not able to teach their
children
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the right
behaviour
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and to prevent
crimes
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committed by them.
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