In some countries, parents expect children to spend long time studying both in and after school, and have less free time. Do you think it has the positive or negative effects on children and society?

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It is argued by some that

children

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should study as much as possible starting in school and extending to their future after finishing school. I think that

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tendency could have more positive effects than negative ones and in

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essay, I will disclose the pros and cons of

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situation.

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when

children

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spend a lot of time for their

studying

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studies

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in school they would increase their chances to

enroll

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in a

highly ranked

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University in the future.

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, they would get a lucrative job and probably would become rich people.

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, as they have good education they could bring a serious contribution to the economics of a country,

in other words

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, they would help

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the prosperity of society as a whole.

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, continuing professional development becomes especially important nowadays when people should follow rapidly changing technologies.

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, when

children

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have no free time for social life and entertainment, it could be harmful to their physical

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mental development. If

children

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are sitting for many hours before a laptop, it is likely they

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have health disorders related to their sight and spine.

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, when a child

have

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less contact with other

children

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he has grown alienated and unlikely he

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be able

communicate

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with colleagues in the future. Naturally, a child

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be happier and more successful in their life when they are able to find a balance between studying or working process and leisure and social life.

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, as can be seen from the points made above, there are positive and negative effects on

children

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and society. Whilst there are many advantages to spending a long time

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studying

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the studying

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process, a possible negative influence would be health and social problems for

children

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. If managed in the right way,

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, I feel that

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advantages would

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the disadvantages.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

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Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

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315 words

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