A person’s worth nowadays seems to be judged according to social status and material possessions. Old-fashioned values, such as honour, kindness and trust, no longer seem important. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience

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recent years be used to judge people as compared
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the past.
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of
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. Old fashioned values no longer matter in the upcoming generation.
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of social media has become a
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where especial the young generation can display their possessions.
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, socialites hire luxurious clothes for certain photoshoots which
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then
posted
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their social media pages which in return increase their followers and
also
their
status
in the community.
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lead many youths to engage in criminal activities
such
as fraud because
this
will enable them
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luxurious items
hence
increase their
status
.
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, peer pressure among the large population has been made to believe when you are poor you are worthless. Children strife so much to have to own material because their
status
increases.
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, during fundraisers in my
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only people with big businesses will be invited as main speakers as compared to a small-scale farmer.
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notion has been very bad especially when growing up. Old virtues are inborn and
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should continue to be to judge someone's worth. Material
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lost over the years and
this
will in the end decrease your social
status
.
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, Nelson Mandela is still remembered for the good values he possessed to date but those with wealth once lost we disregard you in the community. In my conclusion,I agree with the statement.Old fashioned values still get
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upper hand when judging someone's worth.The idea of using material possession judge should be dropped. Material possession
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not there permanently.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Social status
  • Material possessions
  • Old-fashioned values
  • Honour
  • Kindness
  • Trust
  • Judged
  • Importance
  • Traditional
  • Reflection
  • Achievements
  • Hard work
  • Disregarded
  • Well-balanced
  • Meaningful
  • Cultural norms
  • Societal norms
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