A person’s worth nowadays seems to be judged according to social status and material possessions. Old-fashioned values, such as honour, kindness and trust, no longer seem important. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience
Material possession has been in
the
recent years be used to judge people as compared Correct article usage
apply
in
the past.Change preposition
to
This
is so due to development
of Add an article
the development
internet
. Old fashioned values no longer matter in the upcoming generation.
Add an article
the internet
Development
of social media has become a Correct article usage
The development
media
where especial the young generation can display their possessions.Fix the agreement mistake
medium
For example
, socialites hire luxurious clothes for certain photoshoots which is
Change the verb form
are
then
posted in
their social media pages which in return increase their followers and Change preposition
on
also
their status
in the community. This
has
lead many youths to engage in criminal activities Add the particle
tohas
such
as fraud because this
will enable them get
Add the particle
to get
the
luxurious items Correct article usage
apply
hence
increase their status
.
Secondly
, peer pressure among the large population has been made to believe when you are poor you are worthless. Children strife so much to have to own material because their status
increases. For instance
, during fundraisers in my village
only people with big businesses will be invited as main speakers as compared to a small-scale farmer.Add a comma
,village
This
notion has been very bad especially when growing up.
Old virtues are inborn and believe
should continue to be to judge someone's worth. Material Replace the word
belief
get
lost over the years and Change the verb form
gets
this
will in the end decrease your social status
. For example
, Nelson Mandela is still remembered for the good values he possessed to date but those with wealth once lost we disregard you in the community.
In my conclusion,I agree with the statement.Old fashioned values still get a
upper hand when judging someone's worth.The idea of using material possession judge should be dropped. Material possession Correct article usage
the
are
not there permanently.Change the verb form
is
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