Some people think that governments should give financial support to creative artists such as painters and musicians. Others believe that artists should be funded by alternative sources. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Many believe that
artists
are entitled to federal financial assistance, while others feel that they should seek different sources of revenue. In my opinion, in certain
cases
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government aid is justified but for the majority, supplying their own income is a catalyst to create quality artwork. Proponents of
this
policy argue that it can free
artists
to be more creative. If an artist is concerned about paying their rent and buying groceries, they will have less time and energy to dedicate to their artwork. Even more importantly, financial considerations will influence their work. Many painters, writers, and musicians are more likely to produce commercially viable artworks rather than artistically honest ones. There have been numerous examples in the past,
such
as during the Renaissance when painters, sculptors and architects received patronage from the government or wealthy citizens and artistic expression flourished.
However
, these instances are distant exceptions and most
artists
now operate in commercial fields. In conclusion, despite notable instances of the success of government assistance,
artists
benefit from self-reliance.
This
will of course require them to carefully balance artistic and commercial considerations.
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