Some children can learn more efficiently by watching TV. Therefore, children should watch TV regularly both in school and at home? Do you agree or disagree?

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It is indeed a fact that watching
television
is a method of learning effectively for youngsters which is why it is often believed that young ones should have an exposure of
television
both at
school
as well as
home
. I strongly disagree with
this
statement and
this
essay will discuss the reasons for my disagreement.
Firstly
, the other imperative
skills
such
as speaking, writing, and motor
skills
are highly compromised by the exposure
of
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television
at
school
and
home
. It means by watching
television
regularly, the learning of a child will only be limited to what has been telecasted in the program he is watching and there will be least or no time devoted for other
indespensible
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indispensable
skills
which are
tought
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taught
thought
at schools.
for instance
, children may appear
learning
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efficiently by memorizing rhymes,
however
, they just memorize it which can not be called
as
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an
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effective learning because logically there is no learning and just memorization.
Secondly
, exposure
of
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television
both at
school
as well as a
home
becomes a long duration spent in front of screens which impacts eyes.
This
is because
television
has a bright screen that if viewed for a longer duration impacts eyesight.
In addition
, watching it for the learning perspective at
home
as well as schools can result in some severe concerns in young ones.
For instance
,
longer
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hours spent in front of screens results in sleeplessness as well as headaches. These minor concerns are often overlooked at a tender age and become a serious issue in subsequent life.
Therefore
,
although
young ones may learn effectively by viewing
television
throughout their day, it can impact their health. Conclusively, watching tv both at
school
as well as
home
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is might be fruitful from the learning perspective,
however
, other essential
skills
taught at schools as well as mental health are highly compromised.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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