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Some people focus on news in their own country, while others think it is more important to be aware of international news. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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With the proliferation of digital media, it has become easier than ever to follow international
news
 stories.
However
, many
people
 still find it preferable to keep up with local or national
news
instead
. In my opinion, both types of
news
 are essential to keep us abreast of what is happening world.
To begin
 with, the main reason why
people
 prefer reading local
news
 stories is that it has a stronger impact on their lives. By that I mean, that the events happening outside their front doors are more likely to affect their day-to-day life.
For example
, reading about the platforms of their mayoral candidates might help them choose how to vote in an upcoming election. Another possible reason to focus on national
news
 is the facility to get information easier and in the context where
people
 are living in.
This
news
 is considering the language, culture and relevant facts before launching to the public. Accidents in their commute,
for instance
, will have a direct impact
than
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 the traffic outside of the
country
.
On the other hand
, certain
people
 claim that international
news
 is actually more relevant to our lives than events in our own
country
.
This
 is because events on the global stage often have a ripple effect that can profoundly influence
people
 all over the world. The COVID-19 pandemic is a perfect example of a story that began in international
news
 and later became extremely relevant (had serious repercussions to the health and safety of
people
) at home.
Finally
, some
people
 like to focus on international
news
 because they can be updated and learn outside of their perspectives. I take myself as an example of
this
 situation because since I have been living outside of my mother
country
, I still want to keep in touch with the culture of my roots. In my opinion, both international and local are crucial nowadays,
however
 with their differences. While local
news
 will affect more in our daily lives, abroad
news
 might expose us to other languages, cultures and perspectives of the world. To conclude, I believe that everyone has to keep up informed of what is happening
local
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 and globally.
News
 is the best way to communicate and inform us about better options, like changing the pathway to work or a pandemic that comes from another
country
.
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