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Nowadays, international tourism is the biggest industry in the world. Unfortunately, international tourism creates tension rather than understanding between people from different cultures. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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Many countries see that
tourism
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 is
one
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 of the most impactful sectors for
one
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's
country
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 income.
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, some believe that due to different values between
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country
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 to another, it often creates a disruption rather than a positive impact on local
people
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. In my opinion,
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 it is true sometimes foreign
people
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 react badly towards the local
community
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,
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hand
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 they
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 create a lot of opportunity for the locals.
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 with,
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 of the major problems related to multinational
tourism
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 is that foreigners do not always get along with the native
community
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. The differences in the wealth of
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's
country
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 may lead to a different perspective and attitude. Take my
country
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 Indonesia as an example. Indonesia up until now is still considered a developing
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,
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 many Indonesian are living below their desired level of life quality.
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 condition may be resulting in low opinion from the tourist that comes from a more developed
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, and it possibly leading to certain dishonour gestures towards local
people
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.
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, a gap in economic conditions between a
country
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 could impact the way
people
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 interact. Moving on to the positive contribution of global
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,
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 obvious effect of
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 is it can bring economical benefit for the local
community
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.
People
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 who travel across many countries are more likely already to be prepared to spend their money not only to fulfil their accommodation but
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 to bring some souvenirs that can mark their journey.
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, they usually
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 require another service from
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 society to guide them explore many exotic places.
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, due to their many activities, the arrival of foreign
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 will always bring a multitude of
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effects
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 to local business and economy. To conclude, global
tourism
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 does not always bring a negative impact on the local
community
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. Aside from conflicts between
local
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locals
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 and the tourist due to their different background obviously tourists are
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 financially beneficial for the native
people
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.
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