Some countries achieve international success by building specialized facilities to train top athletes instead of providing sports facilities that everyone can use. Do you think it is a positive or negative development?

Many
people
argue that nations can obtain higher achievements international in sport's competitions if they invest in venues aimed solely for the use of elite
sports
competitors. I believe that
this
is not a good practice for
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society as most
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the
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people
will not have
access
to
such
facilities .
Firstly
, it
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that doing physical exercises are very important to maintain
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good health.
Thus
, even if only in order to reduce costs allocated to the health system, governments should
incentivate
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incentivize
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and create tools to allow their
population
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exercises. One way to achieve
such
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is to offer
access
to
sports
facilities, as using
such
specialized places will certainly motivate more
people
to practice a sport.
For example
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paying
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tennis, a tennis court is required. In the same
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, to play soccer, it is necessary to have a soccer field.
Secondly
, by granting
access
to
such
venues to the
population
in general, the chances of developing a greater number of top athletes
also
increase. Obviously, before becoming top athletes, those individuals had to train and exercise a lot.
Also
, by restricting
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access
, the vast majority of the
population
would be barred to enjoy those places paid
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supported by the taxpayers. To conclude, it is my opinion that
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restricting the use of
sports
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from the general
population
has a negative impact on
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society, as a great number of
people
will simply do not be able to play a
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large number of
sports
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special infrastructure.
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