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some people prefer live in a house, while others think that there are more advantages living in the apartment. Are there more advantages than disadvantages to living in a house rather than in a apartment

In the past few decades,there is a significant increase in
people
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 who lives in the flats are more comparing with those lives in the
house
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.While many
people
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 like to live in a
house
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,some believe that living in a flat is more beneficial than a
house
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.I totally support the latter
one
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,there are more demerits than merits to living in a
house
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 comparing with a flat.
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, I will note down the advantages and disadvantages of living in a
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.The primary advantage,it is spacious,
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, it can accommodate more
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.Most of the houses have their own garden and play
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.
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,the disadvantages are more, the predominant
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 is the financial burden,affording a
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 is more costly than an apartment.
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 is the security issues,if a
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 is situated in an isolated
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 ,it won't be safe.
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 but not the least,maintenance is more.To illustrate
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, I had a friend ,who had lived in her
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 in a village, it is not that populated
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.
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 late night during her schooldays,some smugglers came to her home and took most of the valuable things and injured her family members and damaged their property.there was no
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 nearby to help them. Security is the main problem with the houses situated in isolated areas.
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, about apartments.The main advantage is the safety and the protection.
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 building consists of several apartments
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 security is strong and most of the flats are under CCTV surveillance.Other benefits are ,it is affordable,energy consumption is less,
people
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 can interact more as they live in the same building, and easily maintainable.The only drawback is most of the flats won't be having a private garden or play
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.
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, I am living in a flat here with my husband and daughter,for the three of us,
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 flat is more convenient,feasible and maintainable.
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,
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 year back I lived in a
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 which was really costly and maintenance was high,
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 we shifted to the flat. To conclude,in my view,living in an apartment is more advantageous than living in a
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.Ostensibly, advantages are more than advantages living in a
house
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 than a flat.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • privacy
  • outdoor activities
  • gardening
  • customization options
  • renovate
  • structural changes
  • investments
  • appreciation/depreciation
  • maintenance costs
  • utility costs
  • security features
  • gated entries
  • surveillance systems
  • shared amenities
  • community centers
  • suburban
  • rural areas
  • commutes
  • urban centers
  • public transport
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