Some people think the government should establish free libraries in each town. Others believe that it is a waste of money since people can access the Internet to obtain information. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Getting knowledge from various sources is most important at every age. One
group
believe that they can be able to get free books from
library
Add an article
the library
show examples
,
however
, another
group
agree that they do not need
this
facility, where they already have
internet
for
this
purpose. I will discuss both views with
opinion
Add an article
an opinion
the opinion
show examples
as per bellow paragraphs. One
group
of
people
advocates that government should provide
library
Fix the agreement mistake
libraries
show examples
cost free
Add a hyphen
cost-free
show examples
for every city.
This
facility is proved
benefited
Replace the word
beneficial
show examples
for older
people
, who can not be able to search any content on the
internet
.
For instance
, aged
people
must have weak eyes and having
spacts
Correct your spelling
spaces
sports
on
it
Correct pronoun usage
them
show examples
so they can not read anything
with
Change preposition
on
show examples
small
Add an article
a small
the small
show examples
screen. The book is always comfortable for them. Having knowledge or sharing information is most valuable in
Correct your spelling
today's
todays
Change to a genitive case
today's
show examples
world so
this
should be free. The other
group
of
people
think that
this
is
Correct article usage
a total
show examples
total
Change the adjective
totally
show examples
wasting money to give free reading access to anybody. Nowadays
citizen
Fix the agreement mistake
citizens
show examples
can use
internet
Add an article
the internet
show examples
from any corner of the universe to get information.
For example
, Adults always has their mobile phone because it can work
like
Replace the word
as
show examples
a computer so they can get all the details right away with a single click. They find wastage of money in having a book and sitting in a corner and read whatever they need.
Internet
is
easy
Add an article
an easy
show examples
platform for everyone to obtain anything from anywhere. In conclusion, I believe that government should provide free books access in the library only for the senior citizen residents
becuase
Correct your spelling
because
the younger generation does not prefer to get any content with single sitting.
This
facility is very good, but it might have some rules, so everybody has their own zone to stay updated.
Submitted by vishakhashah2393 on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

Essentional vocabulary list for IELTS Writing 7+

Learn how to write high-scoring essays with powerful words.
Download Free PDF and start improving you writing skills today!
Topic Vocabulary:
  • public libraries
  • community centers
  • educational programs
  • democratize access
  • socio-economic status
  • resources
  • reliable internet access
  • digital infrastructure
  • forward-thinking
  • technological advancements
  • digital literacy
  • online educational resources
What to do next:
Look at other essays: