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Scientists predict in the near future, cars will be driven by computers, not people. Why? Do you think it is a positive or negative development?

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It is predicted that unmanned automobiles will soon become a reality. In
this
 essay, I
wil
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will
 demonstrate that the emergence of driverless
cars
 can be ascribed to a host of factors, and
this
 development would offer substantial benefits. There are several justifications for the potential of self-driving
cars
.
Firstly
, given mankind's relentless pursuit of convenience, autonomous
cars
 seem like a natural progression.
This
 desire is emboldened by momentous technological leaps in recent decades.
Initial
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 success of Tesla,
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, among other powerhouses, in trialling autopilot feature
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 has proved that the prospect of self-driving vehicles being released and dominating highways would son no longer science fantasy. I believe that the benefits that autonomous
cars
 could bring to individuals and economic development are plain. It is widely acknowledged that the vast majority of traffic accidents are the result of human error.
Therefore
, relegating humans to passenger status, which helps eliminate reckless
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such
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 drunk driving, road rage, or speeding, could save thousands of lives every year. Increased road safety aside,
self-driving
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the self-driving
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 car industry could be a game changer that will boost economic growth, as it helps cut down operating costs,
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 salary, training, liability insurance,
asociated
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associated
 with human drivers. In conclusion, human natural desire and fast-paced technological
inovations
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innovations
 are the key driving forces for the advent of driverless
cars
, and I am convinced that
this
 type of vehicle, once popularized and optimized, would contribute to road safety and economic growth.
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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Autonomous vehicles
  • Artificial intelligence
  • Sensors
  • Collision avoidance
  • Alleviate
  • Accidents
  • Efficiency
  • Environmental impact
  • Unemployment
  • Freedom of choice
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