The tables below give information about the amount of beer and fruit juice consumed per person per year in different countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The tables below give information about the amount of beer and fruit juice consumed per person per year in different countries.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The tables show the amount of
beer
and fruit juice consumed per person per
year
in countries around the world.
Beer
is most popular in Ireland, with the average Irish drinking 155
litres
per
year
. Germany ranks
second
with 119
litres
per person. In fact, the top six countries in terms of consumption of
beer
are all European. Australia and The United States come
next
in seventh and eighth positions, with
Netherland
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and Finland consuming the
least
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beer
of the countries mentioned. Finnish people only
drink
an average of 79
litres
of
beer
a
year
. The country which consumes
by
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the greatest quantity of fruit juice per capita
is
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Canada. Canadians
drink
an average of 52.6
litres
each
a
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year
, that’s almost double the consumption of New Zealand, which is placed at the bottom of the table. Another North American country, The United States, come
second
in the table,
while
German drinkers are ranked at number three, consuming an average of 38.6
litres
annually. Swedes
drink
approximately the same quantity of fruit juice as Australians, which is 35.5
litres
per
year
. The Finnish and the British
drink
33 and 29.3
litres
per
year
respectively.
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