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Some people think that formal education should start for children as early as possible, while others think that it should not start until 7 years of age. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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It is believed by some that
children
 should start gaining knowledge at the earliest
age
 as possible, whilst
other
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 part of people has a contrary view on that issue, they consider that kids should start their education after turning 7 years. In my opinion, it depends on the
child
 himself and his abilities,
however
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 it is advised for kids to start going to
school
 at the
age
 of 6-7.
This
 essay will provide arguments for both of these viewpoints on the topic of
child
 education. On the one hand,
children
 tend to quickly catch and remember information well and by sending them to
school
 earlier they will discipline in themselves a lot of new good habits. They have a chance to obtain and develop
such
 skills as sociability, working in teams, openness to experience and others.
Moreover
, in that case,
children
 have an opportunity to graduate from
school
 and go to university earlier.
Thus
, getting
education
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 at
early
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age
 can be beneficial
in
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 some extent.
On the other hand
, it might be quite stressful and problematic for little kids to adapt to
new
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area
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. Despite
that
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that child
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children
 have a good memory, it does not decline
that
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 fact that they are too young to store and treat a large amount of information and learn all the material that teachers provide them. Especially, when
educational
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 system becomes more and more challenging every year. Everything has its time. In conclusion, a question about the
age
 of the
child
 for starting
school
 will always be the field of debate. Every parent will send his
child
 to
school
 whenever they see fit. But as far as I
concerned
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, widespread and the best
age
 range to start
school
 is 5 to 7 years, neither earlier nor later.
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