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These days many people prefer online shopping to conventional shopping. What are the advantages and disadvantages of online shopping

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In recent times, technology has
accquired
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acquired
 almost all the
acpects
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aspects
 of daily needs.
People
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 nowadays do not want to go to market
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 and shop whereas they prefer to shop online. Online shopping has
it
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 own pros and cons. On the one hand, there are many advantages of buying
products
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 online.
People
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prefered
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prefer
 online shopping for over a long
time
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 now as it helped them save
time
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 and money. They don't have to go to shopping complexes
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and wait for long queues in try room .
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 they order it online and try it at their own
covinieance
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convenience
.
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, online shopping is more credible than conventional shopping.
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,
customer
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customers
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 can leave
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feedback
of
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 the
products
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 and get
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a refund
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 if they have any kind of issue with the
product
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.Customers can
also
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 get
refrence
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reference
references
 from the reviews left by the customer. While
people
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 buy
products
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 from online platforms they do not have to bargain for the
products
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,
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 companies
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 offer much better discounts online compare to offline shopping.
On the other hand
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,
people
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 might not be satisfied with
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products
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the products
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 they purchased online.
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, most
people
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does
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 not have trust
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 the quality, and originality of the
product
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 they will
recieve
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receive
.
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, if you order a
product
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 online you have to wait for the
product
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 to be
delievered
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delivered
 to your doorstep.
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, every company has its own
measurments
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measurements
measurement
 of their clothing
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 and footwear items. And
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, if they shop conventionally they can spend
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 with their family, have food with them along purchasing
products
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. Even when you go
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window shopping you
intreact
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interact
 with different
people
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this
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 helps them to enhance their interpersonal skills and social
capablities
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capabilities
also
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. To conclude, one must prefer online shopping as it saves
time
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, and
time
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 is precious for everyone.
However
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, both ways of shopping
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it
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their
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 own drawbacks and
benifits
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benefits
benefit
.
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